Name: Reviewer (Anonymous) · Date: February 13, 2013 11:16 am · For: Chapter 1

This was wonderfully bittersweet and gentle. Wish there was more, although as a reader I can anticipate what could have happened if you had continued it based on how concicely it ended. Very good!

My only critique would be that you break up large bodies of text, and begin a new paragraph every time there's a new speaker. For example:

Lindir smiled, "Lord Glorfindel?

"I mean it, I do." Glorfindel took the minstrel's hand and...

"Kiss me."

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